Its hot
The sun is shining and the air is suffocating
The sand burning my feet reminds me of a sizzling fajita skillet
Probably from Applebees
The ocean looks refreshing
As I lay on the blanket I replay the stress of my week
like a movie on the inside of my eyelids
work, school, boyfriend, bills
A friend pours a drink into my cup and I let out a sigh of relief after the first sip
I zone into the radio, while Beyonce sings my emotions
Theres a cool breeze from the ocean that revives me
Like smelling salts
I open my eyes
Im back to reality
well maybe not completely
Not until I finish the rest of this drink
Awesome poem, it sounds relaxing. Something that an average person would do in a hot weather. Also it would seem that the structure of the poem is ok and I see no problem what so ever
ReplyDeleteVery well written. I can see the same format as Frank O'Haras poem. I dont see much wrong with the poem, as in my opinion I think its awesome and intriguing.
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